Peer Editing (to Anne)

★Peer Editing★

Anne's blog: http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/annechen1123/

CLARITY
About Anne’s blog entries most of which make sense well, so I can understand plainly what those topics are. Her opinion on each article is also given clearly. The organization is set in a very proper way, but there are many articles which are not published the sources; therefore, people will have doubt as to the correctness of news you publish. And the style is casual so that I could read them in a free and relaxed mood.

GRAMMAR ﹠PUNCTUATION ﹠SPELLING ERRORS
Grammar:
1. Nouns: count/uncount noun, proper noun, possessive noun
2. Verb tenses: the gerund, the participle
3. Subject-verb agreement
4. The article: using “the” to definite nouns
5. Preposition combinations
6. The causative: followed by the simple form of a verb, not an infinitive
7. The verb “be”: uses as an auxiliary verb in progressive verb tenses and in the passive
8. Noun clauses beginning with a question word

Punctuation:
1. Apostrophes: add only an apostrophe to a plural noun that ends in –s; add an apostrophe and –s to
plural nouns that end in –s
2. Quotation mark
3. Comma (don’t repeat)
4. Semi-colon: to separate two independent clauses with two different events

The following sentences are errors concluding the revisions which I made orderly after looking over all of the articles of the blog carefully. And I suggest that Anne should check the context once more as soon as she finishes it.

1. why there are so many poeople (people) use this weak point to swindle for (swindle out of )money?
2. We can see that many things sold an (in) Taiwan were made in China
3. Or we have to face the problem about no competitiveness with any other countries, (;) we will lose the
chance to reveal ourselves.
4. In my opinions,, (,) there are more and more homosexual bloom around us in our daily life.
5. This news is talk about a monsignor was suspended by the Vatican after he was caught on tape making sexual advances at (to) a young man.
6. he’s (his)opinions are conflict with the holy see. (Holy See)
7. But for the Italian monisgnor (monsignor), he thought he was right, and he thought he was fraudulented (deceived).
8. I think this kind of issues are (is) the most troublesome for the holy see.
9. the parents would take care (take care of) the children at home rather than send them to the special school.
10. they would afraid the children get hurt, or the train (is) maybe too difficult to them
11. As a prisident (president), I think he should assemble his followers to establish a plan to support market’s fluctuant price
12. but our mandarinate (government officials) looks like doesn’t understand the citizens live hardly.
13. one minister said that people can buy a bunch of vegetable with NT.5 dollar (dollars) rather than those high price’s vegetable
14. these words shows (show) that you are not understand (understanding) about the market’s fluctuant price, and you didn’t care about the citizens.
15. The slogan 〝UN for Taiwan 〞 ("UN for Taiwan") is very popular in Taiwan’s news recently.
16. Actually I do not object that Taiwan should enter UN, but I think the governers (governors) should not take this kind of political issues into schools. Although they’re (their) starting point is good.
17. Taiwan and China should be unify (unified) or Taiwan should announce independence
18. if the tourists (tourist) wants to take the taxi but he can not speak
19. Also, Taiwan’s bus stop did not (Taiwan’s bus stops do not) have English version about the bus route! How can the tourists make the package travel then? If Taiwan (Taiwanese) want to promote oue (our) beautiful island, we should do more efforts!
20. I think this policy’s starting point is for Japaneses’ (Japanese’s) security, and more careful defense can avoid suspects’ attack, also the Japan government can promise visitors’ personal safty (safety).
21. this policy can protect everyone in Japan from terroists’ (terrorists’) attack
22. So, we can wait to see how the Japanese government improve (improves) the problems.
23. I think the MOTC need to reference (refer to) other countries that have the high speed rail, the ticket’s prices and how did they institute the price. Do not let the high speed rail only provide the richs (rich) to take. Then this advancement is useless.
24. Many informations (information) about the high speed rail show up
25. Since the high speed rail start s (started ) (the) operation, many problems show up (has showed up)
26. The company which releasing the film need (needs) to provide the safety (safe) place to the little actors