★Peer Editing★
Susan Li's blog: http://www.wretch.cc/album/wretch1117
CLARITY
About Susan Li’s blog entries most of which make sense well, so I can understand plainly what those topics are. Her opinion on each article is given clearly. The organization should be improved to a more conspicuous layout. And the style is casual so that I could read them in a free and relaxed mood. But
some places are unclear, for example, the position of her opinion couldn’t be found instantly.
GRAMMAR ﹠PUNCTUATION ﹠SPELLING ERRORS
Grammar:
1. Nouns: count/uncount noun, possessive pronoun
2. Verb tenses: the gerund, the participle
3. Subject-verb agreement
4. The passive tense
5. Preposition combinations
6. Subordinating conjunction: though, but, since
7. The causative: followed by the simple form of a verb, not an infinitive
8. The verb “be”: uses as an auxiliary verb in progressive verb tenses and in the passive
9. Noun clauses beginning with a question word
10. Forms of “other”: (only two) one…the other…
11. Compound word
Punctuation:
1. Apostrophes: add only an apostrophe to a plural noun that ends in –s; add an apostrophe and –s to plural nouns that end in –s
2. Question mark
The following sentences are errors concluding the revisions which I made orderly after looking over all of the articles of the blog carefully. And I suggest that Susan Li should check the context once more as soon as she finishes it.
1. But I think it is quit a good thing to report the different sides of view of the gencode (genocide).
2. I really admire the person who can express her own though (thought) straightly in a humor (humorous) way.
3. You should be more careful about your speech for demos’ thought will (which/that will) easily be affected by you.
4. Recently, there are more and more research (researches) of baby.
5. and we could advance their education for avoiding they (them) accept (accepting) the wrong message.
6. we will never know hoe (how) amazing baby is.
7. And now, we can comprehend with (comprehend) baby more clearly.
8. Nowadys (Nowadays), we more and more care about our health than before.
9. The comment in this news is (has) a little bit bias.
10. We all know that the company should (should be) responsible for this accident.
11. And another thing is why didn’t the reporter (the reporter didn’t) write if the company was punished or not.
12. We try to provide children a safe and clean environment for protect them from dangerous. → We try to provide a safe and clean environment for children by protecting them from danger.
13. Sometimes we just be (are just) careless and make some mistakes.
14. But sometime it (it is) just because we trust the government and big company too much.
15. How they live, what they eat or what do (what) they do.
16. It’s very interesting that how can people (people can) gain money after they die.
17. What will happen this time? Or what is going on to them. (？)
18. we only are (are only) intrigued the news that has no effect upon us.
19. Because what have happened to them is not our business.→ Because what happened to them which is not our business.
20. but it’s strange and ridiculous to say other’s fault but to cover his own (his) up in every possible way.
21. Thought (Though), I don’t identify with the Oaeda militant’s action
22. I think the one who took that picture were cold-blood (cold-blooded) person
23. Honesty (Honestly), I don’t thing they are professional but utilitarian.
24. And this leads a bad trend which let other reporter (reporters) imitate it.
25. For myself, thought (though) I respect my teacher and put my attention on whether he is a good teacher or not but I never really care about what a teacher should do.→ For myself, though I respect my teacher and put my attention on whether he is a good teacher or not, I never really care about what a teacher should do. Or For myself, I respect my teacher and put my attention on whether he is a good teacher or not, but I never really care about what a teacher should do.
26. I think many of my friends likes (like) me
27. In the dictatorial regime, a teacher just like a watchdogs (watchdog) who would help the government control people’s maid (mind). In other side (On the other side), a teacher in a democracy will let students have their own opinion and encourage them to express it out.
28. they would change their style of teaching to attract student (students’) attention and make things easy for student (students) to learn.
29. I think be (being) a good teacher not just emphasize (emphasizing) his way of teaching but help (helping) his student in a proper way who is in trouble.
30. I can do anything I want (want to) operate within the law.
31. And I think there were many Youngman (young men) just like me were shocked by this news.
32. And we don’t pay too much attention on this issue which (, which) let us ignore whether others have it or not.
33. Anyway it is necessary for the monk (monks) to fight for their freedom.
34. it does make people re-think the definition of good shap (shape).
35. Models always represent the trend of fashionable and prety (pretty).
36. Thus, young girls do what they can do to be like modles (models).
37. And modles (models) who wants to be more beutiful (beautiful) and thinner sometimes will take some violent way.
38. it makes no good to our bady (body).
39. I Really (really) can't understan (understand) why people want their bady (body) look like beautiful but not healthy.
40. Does (Is) beauty so important that they could ignore everything to win the "Good Sape (Shape)"?
2008年1月6日 星期日
Peer Editing (to Anne)
★Peer Editing★
Anne's blog: http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/annechen1123/
CLARITY
About Anne’s blog entries most of which make sense well, so I can understand plainly what those topics are. Her opinion on each article is also given clearly. The organization is set in a very proper way, but there are many articles which are not published the sources; therefore, people will have doubt as to the correctness of news you publish. And the style is casual so that I could read them in a free and relaxed mood.
GRAMMAR ﹠PUNCTUATION ﹠SPELLING ERRORS
Grammar:
1. Nouns: count/uncount noun, proper noun, possessive noun
2. Verb tenses: the gerund, the participle
3. Subject-verb agreement
4. The article: using “the” to definite nouns
5. Preposition combinations
6. The causative: followed by the simple form of a verb, not an infinitive
7. The verb “be”: uses as an auxiliary verb in progressive verb tenses and in the passive
8. Noun clauses beginning with a question word
Punctuation:
1. Apostrophes: add only an apostrophe to a plural noun that ends in –s; add an apostrophe and –s to
plural nouns that end in –s
2. Quotation mark
3. Comma (don’t repeat)
4. Semi-colon: to separate two independent clauses with two different events
The following sentences are errors concluding the revisions which I made orderly after looking over all of the articles of the blog carefully. And I suggest that Anne should check the context once more as soon as she finishes it.
1. why there are so many poeople (people) use this weak point to swindle for (swindle out of )money?
2. We can see that many things sold an (in) Taiwan were made in China
3. Or we have to face the problem about no competitiveness with any other countries, (;) we will lose the
chance to reveal ourselves.
4. In my opinions,, (,) there are more and more homosexual bloom around us in our daily life.
5. This news is talk about a monsignor was suspended by the Vatican after he was caught on tape making sexual advances at (to) a young man.
6. he’s (his)opinions are conflict with the holy see. (Holy See)
7. But for the Italian monisgnor (monsignor), he thought he was right, and he thought he was fraudulented (deceived).
8. I think this kind of issues are (is) the most troublesome for the holy see.
9. the parents would take care (take care of) the children at home rather than send them to the special school.
10. they would afraid the children get hurt, or the train (is) maybe too difficult to them
11. As a prisident (president), I think he should assemble his followers to establish a plan to support market’s fluctuant price
12. but our mandarinate (government officials) looks like doesn’t understand the citizens live hardly.
13. one minister said that people can buy a bunch of vegetable with NT.5 dollar (dollars) rather than those high price’s vegetable
14. these words shows (show) that you are not understand (understanding) about the market’s fluctuant price, and you didn’t care about the citizens.
15. The slogan 〝UN for Taiwan 〞 ("UN for Taiwan") is very popular in Taiwan’s news recently.
16. Actually I do not object that Taiwan should enter UN, but I think the governers (governors) should not take this kind of political issues into schools. Although they’re (their) starting point is good.
17. Taiwan and China should be unify (unified) or Taiwan should announce independence
18. if the tourists (tourist) wants to take the taxi but he can not speak
19. Also, Taiwan’s bus stop did not (Taiwan’s bus stops do not) have English version about the bus route! How can the tourists make the package travel then? If Taiwan (Taiwanese) want to promote oue (our) beautiful island, we should do more efforts!
20. I think this policy’s starting point is for Japaneses’ (Japanese’s) security, and more careful defense can avoid suspects’ attack, also the Japan government can promise visitors’ personal safty (safety).
21. this policy can protect everyone in Japan from terroists’ (terrorists’) attack
22. So, we can wait to see how the Japanese government improve (improves) the problems.
23. I think the MOTC need to reference (refer to) other countries that have the high speed rail, the ticket’s prices and how did they institute the price. Do not let the high speed rail only provide the richs (rich) to take. Then this advancement is useless.
24. Many informations (information) about the high speed rail show up
25. Since the high speed rail start s (started ) (the) operation, many problems show up (has showed up)
26. The company which releasing the film need (needs) to provide the safety (safe) place to the little actors
Anne's blog: http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/annechen1123/
CLARITY
About Anne’s blog entries most of which make sense well, so I can understand plainly what those topics are. Her opinion on each article is also given clearly. The organization is set in a very proper way, but there are many articles which are not published the sources; therefore, people will have doubt as to the correctness of news you publish. And the style is casual so that I could read them in a free and relaxed mood.
GRAMMAR ﹠PUNCTUATION ﹠SPELLING ERRORS
Grammar:
1. Nouns: count/uncount noun, proper noun, possessive noun
2. Verb tenses: the gerund, the participle
3. Subject-verb agreement
4. The article: using “the” to definite nouns
5. Preposition combinations
6. The causative: followed by the simple form of a verb, not an infinitive
7. The verb “be”: uses as an auxiliary verb in progressive verb tenses and in the passive
8. Noun clauses beginning with a question word
Punctuation:
1. Apostrophes: add only an apostrophe to a plural noun that ends in –s; add an apostrophe and –s to
plural nouns that end in –s
2. Quotation mark
3. Comma (don’t repeat)
4. Semi-colon: to separate two independent clauses with two different events
The following sentences are errors concluding the revisions which I made orderly after looking over all of the articles of the blog carefully. And I suggest that Anne should check the context once more as soon as she finishes it.
1. why there are so many poeople (people) use this weak point to swindle for (swindle out of )money?
2. We can see that many things sold an (in) Taiwan were made in China
3. Or we have to face the problem about no competitiveness with any other countries, (;) we will lose the
chance to reveal ourselves.
4. In my opinions,, (,) there are more and more homosexual bloom around us in our daily life.
5. This news is talk about a monsignor was suspended by the Vatican after he was caught on tape making sexual advances at (to) a young man.
6. he’s (his)opinions are conflict with the holy see. (Holy See)
7. But for the Italian monisgnor (monsignor), he thought he was right, and he thought he was fraudulented (deceived).
8. I think this kind of issues are (is) the most troublesome for the holy see.
9. the parents would take care (take care of) the children at home rather than send them to the special school.
10. they would afraid the children get hurt, or the train (is) maybe too difficult to them
11. As a prisident (president), I think he should assemble his followers to establish a plan to support market’s fluctuant price
12. but our mandarinate (government officials) looks like doesn’t understand the citizens live hardly.
13. one minister said that people can buy a bunch of vegetable with NT.5 dollar (dollars) rather than those high price’s vegetable
14. these words shows (show) that you are not understand (understanding) about the market’s fluctuant price, and you didn’t care about the citizens.
15. The slogan 〝UN for Taiwan 〞 ("UN for Taiwan") is very popular in Taiwan’s news recently.
16. Actually I do not object that Taiwan should enter UN, but I think the governers (governors) should not take this kind of political issues into schools. Although they’re (their) starting point is good.
17. Taiwan and China should be unify (unified) or Taiwan should announce independence
18. if the tourists (tourist) wants to take the taxi but he can not speak
19. Also, Taiwan’s bus stop did not (Taiwan’s bus stops do not) have English version about the bus route! How can the tourists make the package travel then? If Taiwan (Taiwanese) want to promote oue (our) beautiful island, we should do more efforts!
20. I think this policy’s starting point is for Japaneses’ (Japanese’s) security, and more careful defense can avoid suspects’ attack, also the Japan government can promise visitors’ personal safty (safety).
21. this policy can protect everyone in Japan from terroists’ (terrorists’) attack
22. So, we can wait to see how the Japanese government improve (improves) the problems.
23. I think the MOTC need to reference (refer to) other countries that have the high speed rail, the ticket’s prices and how did they institute the price. Do not let the high speed rail only provide the richs (rich) to take. Then this advancement is useless.
24. Many informations (information) about the high speed rail show up
25. Since the high speed rail start s (started ) (the) operation, many problems show up (has showed up)
26. The company which releasing the film need (needs) to provide the safety (safe) place to the little actors
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